Forsaken -- Chapter 87
Chapter 87 Nick’s long strides quickly ate up the distance between the hotel and the livery. In his mind he reasoned the timing of the discussion he wanted to have with his new brother and in the...
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I just finished chapter 86 and then noted you just posted 87. This story is wonderful. Heath needs to consider his daughter and take a chance and give the Barkley's a chance. Your story flows nicely.
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Big, bad, Nick Barkley. Was going to hash it out with Heath right then and there. You did a fine job of showing his tender side. It's really rather sad. As much as Nick wanted him gone, he now...
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The man they had fought against joining their family circle now was fighting the unknown future of him and his daughter. A future the man couldn’t or wouldn’t commit to them. They had pushed him off...
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Old Jeb sure cares about Heath and the past they shared along with Heath's care for him now. I think that Heath needs time with Joy before he can commit to the Barkley family. He is also grieving for...
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Heath has so much on his mind right now. His daughter's future must be number one. He may not be ready or able to sort through his feelings about his "family." Will Nick back off and give him some...
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The rhythm and pacing of this chapter made it a joy to read. I loved the way you wove the repeated motif, I’m not promising you the moon, Nick….only what I can give now, throughout the chapter. With...
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Using force with his younger brother would only cause the blond to back further away from them. It seems Nick has learned a great deal about his new brother. He understands how he thinks and how he...
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I’m not promising you the moon, Nick….only what I can give now.” Nick and the rest of the family are regretting now their previous behavior but I think this sentence gives some hope that after some...
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Heath is promising what! All that he can give, at present! More please.
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